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Plastic Shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree and what can be doen to reduce it

#plastic #bags #pollution #land #sea #people #doen
People
 around the world face an important problem
about
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plastic
pollution
. Some
people
 believe that banning
plastic
bags
are
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is
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 necessary for reducing the number of
plastic
pollution
,
while
other
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others
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 argue that restricting
the
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plastic
 shopping
bags
 are
better
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a better
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 solution.
To
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 my view, totally banning from using
plastic
bags
 for shopping are the best
sollution
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solution
 to address
this
 issue
due to
plastic
become
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becoming
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 the biggest
pollution
materials
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material
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in
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worldwide. Looking
the
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disadvatages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
 of banning totally from using
plastic
bags
 for shopping,
people
 believe that
plastic
bags
 can bring a lot of
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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 from
market
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the market
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 and make
easier
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it easier
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 to bring to our
home
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homes
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.
Therefore
,
paper
bags
 become the alternative ways to replace
plastic
bags
,
residents
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as residents
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 believe it is not enough for carrying heavy
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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.
Moreover
, in
traditional
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the traditional
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 market, sellers are not familiar with
paper
bags
due to
paper
bags
 are more vulnerable to water. They believe
plastic
bags
is more
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are
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 cheaper than other
materials
, so if they change to use other
materials
bags
 like
paper
bags
, it will increase the price of goods. Let us
to
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apply
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look
the
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 advantages of
forbiding
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forbidding
 permanently from using
plastic
bags
.
Plastic
 become
the
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a
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 major
pollution
 not only
in
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on
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 land but
also
 in
sea
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the sea
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.
Plastic
materials
 can
threat
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threaten
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 our environment if we are not aware
about
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of
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that
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the
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 impacts.
For instance
,
plastic
bags
 are easy to contaminate our environment
due to
 their
materials
are
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being
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 hard to
decompostion
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decompose
.
In addition
,
plastic
 waste
need
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needs
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 to be recycled because
they
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it
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 can't
be distinguish
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be distinguished
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 without
recycle
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recycling
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.
As
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Consequently
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consequently
, some
people
 change from
plastic
bags
 to
totte
bags
 for shopping because the
totte
bags
 can
cary
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carry
 a lot of goods and
resistant
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are resistant
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 to water. Because of
that
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those
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 reasons, I believe that
people
 should change
for
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from
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 using
plastic
bags
 to
another
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another material
other materials
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materials
 like
totte
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tote
bags
 or
paper
bags
. In conclusion, some
people
 believe that they feel better
for
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about
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 using
plastic
bags
 for shopping,
while
 other
people
 disagree because
plastic
materials
 can damage our environment. I believe that
plastic
bags
 should be banned and we move to use
paper
bags
 or
totte
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tote
bags
.
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