You recently went on a trip with a friend and you both took some photographs. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Ask your friend to send you a particular photograph Explain why you need that particular photograph Tell your friend what happened to your copy of it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Seerat, Hope you are doing well!
what
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a
wonderfull
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wonderful
trip we had.I've still been thinking about it ever since we
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back. Yesterday, I was going through all the
picture
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pictures
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from our vacation to share on all my social media accounts. But, I noticed that there are some photos
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that are
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bulrry
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blurry
and some of them are not clicked from
perfect
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the perfect
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angle. I'm really unhappy to see
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. There is a particular photo, I think you remember that we both clicked a photo of
sunset
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the sunset
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on
beach
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the beach
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while
having
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Mexican
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food near
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the lake
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. What a perfect combination of water and sky we captured in our cameras. If you have that photo, Could you please share
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it with
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me
whenver
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whenever
you get time
.
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Don't take too much time to reply though, as I want to share those moments on
instagram
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Instagram
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and see
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of our friends.Let's plan something soon and can't wait to recreate those memories again. Warm regards with love, Aashima
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Greeting Enhancement
Begin your letter with a more specific and engaging greeting that directly acknowledges your friend, which makes it more personalized. Consider using expressions that reflect you are writing to a close friend, such as 'Dear [Friend's Name], How have you been? I've been reminiscing about our amazing trip...'
Paragraph Structure
Enhance the logical structure by organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Start with a paragraph about why you're writing, followed by the specific request for the photograph, the reason why you need it, and concluding with a look to the future. Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clearer flow and understanding.
Tone Adjustment
While the tone is generally suitable, aim for a consistent friendly and warm tone throughout. Avoid phrases that might sound impersonal or too formal for a letter to a friend. Instead, use expressions that convey enthusiasm and a personal connection, such as 'Remember that breathtaking sunset we captured?'
Detail Enhancement
Task achievement could be enhanced by providing more detail about why the particular photograph is important to you, beyond wanting to post it on social media. Share specific emotions or significances tied to the photo to make a stronger impact.
Flow Improvement

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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