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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Nowadays, most of the public opinions think that they do not have enough proportion of their scum to be recycled.
Moreover
, they agree that policies are needed as
government’s
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 responsibility to increase recycling activities. In my point of view, I agree with
this
 statement because of some reasons. The main reason is that the governments have a big power to make a rule for the citizens to collect the rubbish from their houses in
a
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 same place. It is because when they put together their litter in
a
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 same place, they help to easier way for recycling operator to manage it.
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,
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recycling places are needed to help the operators. As
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the
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 result, the recycling processes will rise
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because of
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it
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. The other reason is that the policies which
is
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 required by the governments will have a punishment for someone who
not
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 obey
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, so
people
 are pushed to implement the laws with no excuse. The laws
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also
 make some
people
 who do not have any awareness about their scum will have any consideration.
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 the electronic speeding ticket on the roadway as an example,
people
 tend to follow the rule of driving speed limitation because they do not want to get a penalty.
To sum up
, the best choice to make
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 rate
is
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higher than before is the governments who have a big role in
arrange
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 the policies can command the
people
 to manage their
scums
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 in the same place, and
also
 they can put the penalty
for
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people
 who break the rules.
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