The diagram below shows the process of recycling aluminium drink cans.
The chart illustrates the different steps involved in the process of recycling aluminium drink
cans
.
Overall
, a total of 11 stages are shown in this
recycling process, from the delivery of used cans
to the recycling plant to the production of new recycled cans
, taking a total of 6 weeks from start to finish.
First,
the recycled cans
are collected and transported by trucks and then
deposited at the recycling factory. Next,
the cans
are washed before they are crushed at the next stage. Subsequently
, the process continues in the factory, including the use of chemicals to erase designs.
At
the seventh stage, the crushed Change preposition
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cans
are heated and are then
shaped in a mould to ensure they are a uniform size. Next,
the moulded cans
are checked so that they are all the same weight before they pass through a rolling machine. Finally
, after rolling, new recycled cans
are produced and ready for use again.Submitted by thaovuphuong19 on
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