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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map shows the city of Garlsdon
that
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which
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 will be developed by building a
departement
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department
 store.
Overall
, There are
65 000
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65,000
 people who are living in Garlsdon. The town has two possible places to build a
supermartket
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supermarket
, either in
rural
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a rural
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area
 or in the centre of
urban
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the urban
an urban
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area
.
These both
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Both
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 places have the main roads to access and nearly the subway. The first
area
 near
to
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apply
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Hindon
surrounded
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surrounds
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 the
industry
while
 the second
place
next
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is next
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 to Bransdon
as well as
 Cransdon and it will
place
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be placed
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 at no traffic zone. The first
place
, nearest to Hindon with
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a lenght
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lenght
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length
in12
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of in12
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km and
have
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a population
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 10.000 population. Most
industry
 activities are near
to
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apply
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rural
area
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areas
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as well as
the
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apply
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housing.
While the
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The
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 second
place
,
surrounded
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is surrounded
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 by commercial
industry
 in
west
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the west
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 and east areas
whereas
 in south and north have the housings. It nears
to
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apply
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Bransdon
with
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apply
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16 km which
have
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has
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15.000
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a 15.000
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populatian
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population
populations
 and 25 km to get
Cransdon
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to Cransdon
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 with 29.000 people there. It
also
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is also
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 very
closed
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close
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 to
rail
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the rail
a rail
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 station. It means
than
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that
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 people from
countryside
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the countryside
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 and
industry
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industrial
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 areas will
easy
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easily
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 to get
this
place
 by the local train.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, industry, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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