The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map shows the city of Garlsdon
that
will be developed by building a Correct pronoun usage
which
departement
store.
Correct your spelling
department
Overall
, There are 65 000
people who are living in Garlsdon. The town has two possible places to build a Correct your spelling
65,000
supermartket
, either in Correct your spelling
supermarket
rural
Add an article
a rural
area
or in the centre of urban
Add an article
the urban
an urban
area
. These both
places have the main roads to access and nearly the subway. The first Correct determiner usage
Both
area
near to
Hindon Change preposition
apply
surrounded
the Wrong verb form
surrounds
industry
while
the second place
next
to Bransdon Add a missing verb
is next
as well as
Cransdon and it will place
at no traffic zone.
The first Wrong verb form
be placed
place
, nearest to Hindon with Correct article usage
a lenght
lenght
Correct your spelling
length
in12
km and Change preposition
of in12
have
10.000 population. Most Verb problem
a population
industry
activities are near to
rural Change preposition
apply
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
as well as
the
housing. Correct article usage
apply
While the
second Correct word choice
The
place
, surrounded
by commercial Add a missing verb
is surrounded
industry
in west
and east areas Add an article
the west
whereas
in south and north have the housings. It nears to
Bransdon Change preposition
apply
with
16 km which Change preposition
apply
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
15.000
Correct article usage
a 15.000
populatian
and 25 km to get Correct your spelling
population
populations
Cransdon
with 29.000 people there. It Change preposition
to Cransdon
also
very Add a missing verb
is also
closed
to Change the form of the verb
close
rail
station. It means Add an article
the rail
a rail
than
people from Correct word choice
that
countryside
and Add an article
the countryside
industry
areas will Replace the word
industrial
easy
to get Change the word
easily
this
place
by the local train.Submitted by innezgracias on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, industry, place with synonyms.
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