Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion
  • privately owned vehicles
  • ban
  • city centers
  • traffic congestion
  • air pollution
  • noise levels
  • urban environment
  • public transport
  • environmentally friendly
  • healthier lifestyle
  • commuting
  • congestion charges
  • peak times
  • environment-friendly vehicles
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