The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site
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The
two
maps below illustrate the
school
site in 2004 and how developed in 2024.
It is clear that
there
is
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are
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extensive alternatives including a new building,
car
park and road. In 2004, there were
two
school
buildings
which had 600 students and
two
schools separated by a path.
School
building 1
surrounded
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is surrounded
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by trees. In the west of the
school
buildings
, there was a sports field.
Also
, there was a
car
park in the northeast of the
school
site which was next to the main entrance. In 2024, the number of students will increase and reach to 1000 students.
Also
,
school
buildings
1 and 2 will connected together and the path between the
two
buildings
will removed. Sports fields will demolished and a new
school
building will constructed and accessed to
school
buildings
1 and 2 with a path. In the east of the
school
side, the forest will be knocked down and new
car
parking will built which accessed to
car
parking 1 with the road.
Furthermore
, in the south of the
car
parking, 2 trees will chopped and a new sports field will constructed
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two, school, car, buildings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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