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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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The issue of deciding what should go on academic curricula has been hotly debated, with some arguing that
time
 would be better spent preparing for the exams with no
time
 wasted on other
skills
such
 as cooking or dressing. Personally, I believe that the purpose of education is to develop children’s potential, and
this
 would mean teaching them not only academic subjects but
also
 life
skills
.
Firstly
, the idea that schooling exists only to get young minds through a series of standardized exams can result in a generation of students
that
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 know nothing more than studying and who are unable to develop their potential. Education is meant to be a tool to empower and uplift children, to prepare them for the world and to ensure they thrive within it; to twist it into a mere scheme for achieving high scores on exams is to miss the point entirely, and could result in them not being able to discover hidden talents. Children who are taught to cook at an early age,
for example
, might find that it is their
specialty
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 - as they grow up, they might rather be a chef than an average worker.
Secondly
, whilst some will argue that
this
 job should be delegated to the parents, relying on them to teach essential life
skills
 is a flawed idea as they are not likely to have both the experience and the opportunity to teach
such
skills
. Most
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 families hold down two or three jobs at once, and are unable to make the
time
 to teach
such
skills
; students should
therefore
 be taught basic housework
skills
 in order to take care of themselves and support their parents. By saving
time
 cooking,
for instance
, mothers can
instead
 focus on answering emails, allowing them to supplement family income and better support their
child
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 in other ways. In conclusion, I believe that only teaching students about academic knowledge means missing out on potential talent and results in more responsibility on parents; as
such
, I argue that other
skills
 should be taught as well.
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