Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. *Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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significant
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some species of trees and animals die out.
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believe that
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the disapperaing
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disapperaing
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disappearing
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believe
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been increasing because
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people are
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cutting forests
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because
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deforestations
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incaresing
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increasing
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cultivating
the land for
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agriculture
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greenhouse gas carbon dioxide and,
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methane
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countinusaly
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continually
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rising
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which may be
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cause
of die out of
the
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some
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specific
species of plants and animals are
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their
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habitat
habitats
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, in India
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forests
land
are
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dicreasing
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decreasing
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a spaical
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spaical
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special
spacial
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environment
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extent
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.
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,
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environmental problems
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increasing
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industries
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to produce
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their
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use
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as a main
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source
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industrial
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revolution
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demand
are
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growing up, and people are using
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form
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gas because
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they
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for
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transportation
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cause
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the emision
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emision
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emission
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of greenhouse gas.
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study shows that
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fuels
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has
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a vitel
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vitel impect
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vital impact
on
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climate change and it is playing
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an essencial
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essencial
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essential
role
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increasing
of 15 % of
mother earth
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temprature
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temperature
. In
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conclusion
,
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while
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enviromental
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environmental
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issues
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issue
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issues
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is
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are
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rasing
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raising
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becasue
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because
of excessive use of
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fossil
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fuel
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and growing
defosation
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deforestation
defecation
.
i
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thing
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think
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that climate change
are
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is
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incresing becous
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increasing because
of
number
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a number
the number
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of factors involved .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystems
  • irreplaceability
  • endangered species
  • habitat depletion
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • deforestation
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainability
  • conservation efforts
  • pollution
  • ecological balance
  • resource scarcity
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • impact assessment
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