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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The bar graph shows four different materials that were recycled in an unknown country, over a 25-year period.
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, we have paper and cardboard, which started in 1982 from 65 per
cent
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, followed by rapid changes, 70 per
cent
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 after 4
years
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, 80 per
cent
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 in the first 12
years
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 and 70 per
cent
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 in 2010. Moving forward to the glass containers, it starts from 50 per
cent
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 in 1982 but after a decrease reaching 40 in 1990, but for the next
years
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, after a gradual increase, in 2010 the percentage reached 60 per
cent
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, just under the paper and cardboard. The next material is aluminium can , the period of recycling is shorter than others, it starts in 1986, but after a gradual increase in the next eight
years
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, the percentage is slightly over 20 per
cent
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, and after suffering a rapid increase, in 2010 reached over 40 per
cent
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. The
last
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 material is plastic and is the least material recycled, starting from approximately 5 per
cent
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, is maintained over a 30-year period, and in 2010 it ended at nearly 10 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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