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The given bar chart presents how many million people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014.

The given bar chart presents how many million people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014.
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The provided table depicts
that
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the public transportation utilized by people between the years 2010 and 2014. The table shows that
public
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the public
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had
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used
metro
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the metro
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higher
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more
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 than any other
transports
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transport
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. The least used commute was taxis. Buses were considered as
second
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the second
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 least vehicle which had been utilized.
Trams
 were famous
as well as
 trains. In the year 2010, 3
millions
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million
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 individuals travelled in
metro
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the metro
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whereas
 5
millions
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million
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 commuted in
metro
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the metro
a metro
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 in 2014 where there is
surge
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a surge
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 in
the
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growth. The trains were the second transit which was famous as 1.4
millions
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million
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 travelled in 2010 and 3.6
millions
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million
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 in 2014. Individuals journeyed in
trams
 and
as well as
 buses
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were
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where
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were
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 1 million in
buess
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bues
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and
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1.3 million in
trams
 in the year 2010 and 2.4
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million
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millions
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million
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 in buses
while
 2.2
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million
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millions
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million
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 in
trams
. The given tabular column
potrays
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portrays
 that there
is
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has been
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 an increase in
commute
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commutes
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 in
the
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public
transportationover
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transportation over
 the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trams, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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