The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010
The provided bar chart compared the proportion of
past-time
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part-time
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employees in England, Northern
Ireland
, Scotland,
Wales
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and Wales
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in the period between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, the chart
illustrate
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that the percentage of
past-time
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part-time
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workers in 2010 dominated almost in all given countries of The UK, with the exception of
Northern
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Ireland
figure
.
Moreover
, the proportion of
Wales
in both years reached a peak.
According to
the data, the percentage of part-time employees in
Wales
reached its peak
with
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approximately 32%,
whereas
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figure
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Scotland remained
the
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lowest point
with
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just above 10%. Nearly a quarter
part-time
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England workers were in 1980.
However
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Northern
Ireland
stood at about 15% in the same year.
On the other hand
, there was a
slightly
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reduction of around 2% in
trend
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of Northern
Ireland
in 2010.
While
,
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the
figure
of
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Scotland went up gradually to 20% in the same year. Noticeable, the percentage of
Wales
and England came top with almost 35% and 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland, wales, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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