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The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010

The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010
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The provided bar chart compared the proportion of
past-time
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part-time
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 employees in England, Northern
Ireland
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, Scotland,
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Wales
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and Wales
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 in the period between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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illustrate
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 that the percentage of
past-time
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part-time
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 workers in 2010 dominated almost in all given countries of The UK, with the exception of
Northern
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the Northern
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Ireland
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figure
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.
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, the proportion of
Wales
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 in both years reached a peak.
According to
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 the data, the percentage of part-time employees in
Wales
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 reached its peak
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 approximately 32%,
whereas
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 the
figure
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of
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 Scotland remained
the
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at the
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 lowest point
with
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 just above 10%. Nearly a quarter
part-time
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of part-time
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 England workers were in 1980.
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of
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 Northern
Ireland
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 stood at about 15% in the same year.
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, there was a
slightly
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 reduction of around 2% in
trend
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the trend
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 of Northern
Ireland
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 in 2010.
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,
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apply
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 the
figure
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of
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 Scotland went up gradually to 20% in the same year. Noticeable, the percentage of
Wales
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 and England came top with almost 35% and 30%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland, wales, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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