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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart describes information regarding foreign visitors number in
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the
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European areas
such
 as
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the coast
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coast
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the coast
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,
mountains
 and
lakes
 from 1987 to 2007.
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, it is noticeable that the amount of
the
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mountains
 and
coast
 guests increased
while
 the
lakes
 experienced a decline
in
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 the end of
period
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the period
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. It is witnessed the
lakes
 reached
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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in
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 the beginning and the end of
frame
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 time. Looking in more detail, the sum of people
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who come
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come
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came
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 to see the
mountains
 and
coast
 were nearly 20.000 and 40.000 respectively. In the
mountains
, there was a gradual increase for ten years. From 1997 to 2002, the
amount
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number
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 of visitors in the
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mountain
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mountains
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 area remained
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at
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to
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 30.000 individuals. After that, it was followed by steady growth until 2007. In the meantime, folks number who visited the
coast
 steadily declined in 1992 and increased significantly
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to almost
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almost
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 80.000 in 2007. Meanwhile, in the
lakes
amount
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the amount
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 of foreign visitors stood at 10.000 in 1987 and was followed by a sharp rise during ten years.
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it was
continued
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followed
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 by a small fluctuation which
starting
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started
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by
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 a dramatic growth and peaked highest to over 70.000 people.
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there was a sudden drop from 2002 to 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, mountains, lakes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • popular destination
  • significant changes
  • peak
  • trough
  • speculate
  • geopolitical events
  • attractiveness
  • positive outlook
  • challenges
  • tourism industry
  • overseas visitors
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