The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events
The provided table illustrates the percentage of the number of attendees to arts events in 20
years
in the UK.It is clear from the graph that ,it can be clearly seen from the table that, the people
who attended just to see their favourite artist have the highest per cent in all periods, while
those who went for business have the lowest number.
According to
what is shown, those who went to see a performer 20 years
ago were 58%, then
10 years
ago 55%, but today they are 56%. Secondly
, regarding the people
accompanying their children, it’s clear to see that 20 years
ago just was 9%, 10 years
ago, 15% but today they have risen to reach 24%. Moreover
, there were 27% of people
attended because had a special occasion for 20 years
, and the next year after year the percentage decreased to 9% nowadays.
To sum up
, we could say that, In the ,
end we have some Remove the comma
apply
people
attending arts events for work, the number increased according to
the data, 6% in the past and 11% in the last
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