The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events

The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events
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The provided table illustrates the percentage of the number of attendees to arts events in 20
years
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in the UK.It is clear from the graph that ,it can be clearly seen from the table that, the
people
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who attended just to see their favourite artist have the highest per cent in all periods,
while
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those who went for business have the lowest number.
According to
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what is shown, those who went to see a performer 20
years
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ago were 58%,
then
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10
years
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ago 55%, but today they are 56%.
Secondly
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, regarding the
people
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accompanying their children, it’s clear to see that 20
years
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ago just was 9%, 10
years
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ago, 15% but today they have risen to reach 24%.
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, there were 27% of
people
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attended because had a special occasion for 20
years
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, and the next year after year the percentage decreased to 9% nowadays.
To sum up
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, we could say that, In the
,
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end we have some
people
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attending arts events for work, the number increased
according to
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the data, 6% in the past and 11% in the
last
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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