The diagram shows the procedure of university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecture describing the information.

The diagram shows the procedure of university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecture describing the information.
The provided chart
depic
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depict
depicts
the method of
taking
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apply
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admission
in
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to
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university
for
the
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apply
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students who completed
their
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apply
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High school.
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, it is
clearly
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send
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apply
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that
admission
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the admission
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department
please
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plays
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and major role
to complete
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in completing
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the procedure
of
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for
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university
entry. Looking at the flowchart in detail, the students who finished
their
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apply
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high school
needs
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need
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to fill up the
application
form
of
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from
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University
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the University
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which is available
at
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on
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the website.
Then
, they need to send
this
form
to
admit
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the admit
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department. Here, the administrative officer
check
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checks
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the
form
and can reject
if
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it if
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they are not capable. Analysing the chart
further
, if
admin
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the admin
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reject
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rejects
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the
application
then
applicant
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the applicant
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can either complete another
form
with
alternative
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an alternative
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course and send it to
admin
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the admin
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office again or
can
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apply
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cancel the
application
. If the information is incomplete
then
,
authority
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the authority
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at admin officer can put that
application
in provisional acceptance and provide two weeks for completion of the
form
and for resubmission
Finally
, if all the documents and information of
application
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the application
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sounds
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sound
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perfect to
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the administratives
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administratives
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administrators
then
, they accept the
application
within 2 weeks.
The following step is
that students need to select
there
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their
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appropriate subjects and
further
they have to register that confirmation with
dean
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the dean
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. As the registration with
dean
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the dean
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completes learners can enter the
university
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words university, application, form with synonyms.
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