The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.
The maps depict developments in the design of a bookstore between 2000 and the present.
Overall
, the arrangement of the bookstore has been significantly changed, especially on the left side of the room. A number of features have been moved and modified
while
other facilities have been added. In 2000, there was a large section which is called fiction on the left side of the store.
However
, that section has been divided into four new sections that
books
on art, hobbies, cookery and fiction
area
are now demonstrated. The
area
for fiction
books
in the left corner of the store has been used for non-fictional
books
whereas
previous
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non-fiction
area
has been changed into a new cafe. In 2000, the central
area
of the store was used for art, hobbies and cookery
books
.
However
, now that
area
have
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been demolished and tables and chairs have been added. The space for travel, new
books
and service
desk
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remained unchanged throughout
period
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the period
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.
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