A flow chart shows the process of processing wool into cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A flow chart shows the process of processing wool into cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
A giving flow chart presents the process of wool which is a type of cloth's ingredient from sheep
flu
to cloth.
It is clear that
there are many steps
of
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whole
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process,
it
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and it
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is
also
be explains
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explained
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in three parts. The first
step
of the first
part
of
process
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is shearing the
flu
from sheep skin.
Secondly
,
cleaning
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out
dust
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of
flu
and washing several times until it is clear enough for
using
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.
Then
, drying is a very important and hard
step
,
also
is the
last
step
of
this
part
. The
sceond
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second
part
begin
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with processing wool by spinning dry
flu
,
then
colouring wool tufts and
store
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them in storage spaces. There are some string wools
recycle
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in the spinning
step
as well.
Then
, moving to the
last
part
, yarn balls can be
servied
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served
serviced
for knitting or made
to
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products which
sale
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in cloth stores and
vanders
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venders
vendors
,
such
as different
style
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styles
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of carpets and jackets.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words flu, step, part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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