There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co- arrange the party. In your letter: • Say what would you do differently than last year • Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year • Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.
Dear Sir/Ma'am,
I'm Kulbeer here writing a letter, as you all know every time we hold an annual effort celebration. Let's all gear up for new ideas to make the celebration more enjoyable. We would not arrange the event like the previous year.
This
time I would like to suggest to you all that we will arrange the party differently. I want to suggest that the party theme, we organized in the last
event should be changed to go out for picnic because in the past year we all decided to go out for fishing but that didn't work as we all thought it could .I want you all to suggest a picnic location where we can conduct different types of games, dance to music and so on. I think the decoration of the place last
time was not put up well so we have to task on that part and plan something extraordinary for that. Let's all dress up universally because it will look good and it will show that we are a team and we work together. I want to suggest you all to- gather in a cafeteria during the lunch break.
I will be there waiting for you all.
Thank youSubmitted by jatinderpanaich328 on
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A formal greeting is preferred in professional communications. Using 'Dear Colleagues' might be more suitable than 'Dear Sir/Ma'am' for writing to a group within a workplace context.
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The letter lacks clarity on the specific duties or tasks you suggest to take on or delegate for the party planning, which is essential for a complete response to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The writing could benefit from clearer organization and logical structure. Introduce each point you wish to make in a new paragraph and use linking words for better flow.
coherence cohesion
To improve cohesion, try to group related ideas together and use transitional phrases to smoothly guide the reader from one point to the next.
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The tone of the letter occasionally shifts between casual and semi-formal. For workplace communication, maintaining a consistently professional tone is crucial. Avoid overly casual expressions for a more polished presentation.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,