The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The picture details the manufacturing process for instant noodles.
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entirely man-made operation can be divided into 4 main stages beginning with storage of raw ingredients, assembling the dry noodles, cooking and
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packaging for later consumption. Instant noodles start in storage silos where the flour is kept. The flour is transported,
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water and oil from another source, to the mixers and rolled into sheets of dough beginning the assembly line steps. These sheets are cut into strips with factory machinery and
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formed into compact ‘Noodles discs’ to be fried in oil, left to dry and ultimately placed in cups
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assorted vegetables and spices. The final preparation step is to label and seal the contents so that the end product is ready for retail.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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