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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebra;ng New Year in different countries. Write a le@er to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebra;ons in your country

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Dear John, I hope you’re well. I thought you might be interested to hear
know
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apply
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that
give
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giving
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 a new college project about celebra>
ong
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the
 New
Year
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 in different countries and I congratulate you on
this
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 and wish you success. In
this
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leBer
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leber
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 I want to
told
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 you about a celebra>ong New
Year
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 in Iran, we call Noruz. Noruz begins with
spring
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the spring
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 season and all of
companies
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the companies
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 and
organiza>ons be
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organisations are
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 closed
expert
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to expert
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 hospitals and emergency
organiza>ons
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organisations
. People go
to
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on
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a trip
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trip
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trips
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 and own ci>es and congratulate together, they see and visit together and elders of
family
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the family
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 like grandfathers and moms give to children some giG like
colored
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 eggs, money and
host
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the host
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 welcomes the guests with nuts and sweets. Every new
year
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 I think about events that happened
in
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last
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year
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 and make
planning
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plans
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 for
new
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the new
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year
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to
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how I can improve myself and my skills
for
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to
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 make a new life
and
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apply
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what are my weaknesses and how can I fix them
?
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 Once again, thank you for asking me I hope that
helpful
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 Best wishes, Ali

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logical structure
To enhance the logical structure of your letter, consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly around each topic you're discussing. Begin with an introduction, then address each bullet point in a separate paragraph, and conclude with a closing statement.
greeting and closing
Your greeting is appropriate, but your closing could be more formal or connected to the content of the letter. Consider using a conclusion that summarizes your main points or offers a final thought on the topic.
single idea per paragraph
You've done well in dedicating paragraphs to different topics; maintain this approach but ensure each paragraph is more focused and develops a single idea more thoroughly.
complete response
To fully respond to the task, make sure to address all bullet points in the prompt clearly. Expand your explanation on the importance of New Year in your country and emphasize specific celebration details and your personal thoughts.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your writing is suitable for communicating with a friend. However, strive for consistency in tone throughout the letter. Also, pay attention to using formal language appropriately, even in a semi-formal or informal letter, and avoid informal abbreviations or colloquial expressions.
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