The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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us the Revolution of owing Things that
works
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on electricity and
number
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the number
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of Hours in House to
done
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their work in one country from 1920 to 2019.
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, In 1920 almost no one
has
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Refrigerator
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a Refrigerator
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in their house and a
dramatically
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rise
the
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number of refrigerators from 0
percentage
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to about 55
percent
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per cent
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in 1940 and
then
again
increase
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increased
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the percentage about 90
percent
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per cent
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in 1960 and 100
percent
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per cent
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in 2019.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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