The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995
The 2 pie charts depict data
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the highest level of women’s formal
education
in Someland in 1945 and five decades later.
Overall
, it is obvious that
third grade
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education
and
post graduate
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were the highest in 1945.
In contrast
, after fifty years, the percentage of
first degree
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study
program
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becam
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became
the highest rate.
According to
the pie chart in 1945, over
one
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third
of the chart is
third grade
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education
.
Moreover
, the ratio of post
graduate
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was similar to
those
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of
third
grade with 35%.
Nevertheless
, the rate of
first degree
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level was the lowest with only 1%.
In addition
,
year
6,
year
9 and
year
12
education
were 15%, 10%,
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and 4
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% respectively. Regarding
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the information
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50 years later, the first degree level increased dramatically and became the biggest with 50%. On top of that, the
year
12 and
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academic performances were 20%.
Last
but not least, the rest of the chart was the data
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year
9
education
.
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