some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent, do uou agree or disagree?

The majority of

people

believe that eh

age

when the

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stop working should be increased immensely as the result of the longer

age

of many

people

than

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However

, the author of

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essay totally

disagree

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with

this

viewpoint since

as

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the old is not strong enough to work and it can

also

make

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an invisible pressure on their mental health. One of the most primary

reason

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why the governments should not

raised

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the aged-retire

that

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the

elders

' strength and intellect

is

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not enough to reach the standard of working. It can

also

be seen that the

people

who stop working at over the

age

of 50 or 60

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is

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weaker, slower and the most important one is their intelligence is not as bright and sensitive as

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the

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Furthermore

,some of the old can not live

aas

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as

long as

their

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thought; in spite of

this

, they should be returned home and leave their

last

life beside their family

insted

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instead

of

the

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working

equipments

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.

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,

the

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America

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residents who

is

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over 55 have received

the

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retirement

pension

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from the funding until they disappear

on

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word

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. Another key component of the retired

age

should not be increased

that

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it can

also

negatively affect the

elders

' spirit.

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has been self-evident that the standard-retired

age

is the period

time

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at which they can stop working;

moreover

, if the authorities had changed the policy immediately, the

elders

would be

boring

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and

disappointing

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on

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working. For that reason, in lieu of

make

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a

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pressure on the

elders

, putting the juvenile to carry on what the pioneer generation's work and inherited the soul of the old is the better

soution

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solution

. Case in point,

this

is a survey on the Chinese that there is not any retired-

age

policy for the

elders

;

as

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this

reason, the old are tired and would prefer to move to

another countries

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to enjoy their life so the GDP of China is decreased though the overpopulated phenomenon is serious. In conclusion, the

increasing

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of

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the

aged-retire

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elderly

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have

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a big impact on the

elders

' spirit and mental health.

At the end

of

this

essay has clearly proven that the authorities should not raise the

age

at which

people

reitire

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retire

from working considerably

due to

the pressure has made on the old and the old

age

problems.