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The diagram shows the butterfly cycle

The diagram shows the butterfly cycle
Contained in the diagram is information about the cycle of a butterfly.
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, the life cycle of a butterfly consists of 6 stages, commencing with laying eggs on the
leave
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 to
become
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becoming
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 a
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caterpilla
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caterpillar
 and
finally
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culminates
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 with a fully grown adult. In the initial
stage
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, the female butterfly lays hundreds of eggs on the surface of the leaf which remain for 3 to 5 days before hatching to become an infant
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caterpilla
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caterpillar
. Once the
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caterpilla
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caterpillar
caterpillars
appeared
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appears
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, it will eat the
egg shell
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eggshell
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 first and continue eating leaves
in
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for
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 most of
their
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 time leading to
rapidly
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 growth in size. Having completed all of these steps, the
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caterpilla
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caterpillar
 is going to move on to the next
stage
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 where
they
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it
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 will be able to make the chrysalis and attach
itself
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themselves
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 to the underside of the leaf after shedding
for
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several times and
molting
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moulting
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. At
this
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 point, depending on the temperature, the period of pupa phase can
last
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 between 8 and 14 days. In the next
stage
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, the chrysalis will turn clear and reveal the butterfly inside
while
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 simultaneously the monarch emerges from the pupa. At the penultimate
stage
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 of its development, the butterfly remains motionless in order to wait for the wings to be fully
unfold
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coupled with
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 dried and the cycle starts again.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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