The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials They were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
The given graph demonstrates the recycling rate for four various materials from 1982 to 2010 in the various countries.
Overall
, we can observe that Correct article usage
the aluminum
aluminum
cans rate increased sharply, but Change the spelling
aluminium
other
Correct article usage
the other
materials
Change noun form
materials'
material's
percentage
just made a few changes.
Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
Firstly
, we can indicate that paper, cardboard and glass containers appeared in 1982. The percentage of organic and glass materials was similar to each other. The blue graph has a fluctuation tendency since 1982. For the first 10 years it reached 70 percentage
level, but returned to the old proportions. In the Replace the word
per cent
last
20 years
the highest per cent was 80. After that, the level decreased steadily until 2010. In the first 8 years Add a comma
years,
glass
Correct article usage
the glass
containers
range fell down to 40 per cent, Fix the agreement mistake
container
then
since 1990 it started to raise
slowly.
Correct your spelling
rise
Secondly
, the
aluminum cans and plastics Correct article usage
apply
formed
in 1986 and 1990. The green graph has a stable growth over all periods of time and reached about 45 per cent in the end.
Add a missing verb
were formed
On the other hand
, plastic tendency has a very slow growth during a 20 year
period.Add a hyphen
20-year
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