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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials They were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials They were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The given graph demonstrates the recycling rate for four various materials from 1982 to 2010 in the various countries.
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, we can observe that
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the aluminum
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aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans rate increased sharply, but
other
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the other
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materials
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materials'
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percentage
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 just made a few changes.
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, we can indicate that paper, cardboard and glass containers appeared in 1982. The percentage of organic and glass materials was similar to each other. The blue graph has a fluctuation tendency since 1982. For the first 10 years it reached 70
percentage
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per cent
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 level, but returned to the old proportions. In the
last
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 20
years
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 the highest per cent was 80. After that, the level decreased steadily until 2010. In the first 8 years
glass
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the glass
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containers
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container
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 range fell down to 40 per cent,
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 since 1990 it started to
raise
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 slowly.
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,
the
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aluminum cans and plastics
formed
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were formed
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 in 1986 and 1990. The green graph has a stable growth over all periods of time and reached about 45 per cent in the end.
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, plastic tendency has a very slow growth during a
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 period.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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