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The three pie charts below show the in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The two charts below illustrate the changes in the use of revenue yearly by a specific school in 1981 and 1991. It is clear from the graph that , in both 1981 and 1991 most money was spent on teachers' salaries
while
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 the least was spent on insurance. More money was used in resources
such
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 as books in 1981 than in 1991.
According to
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 what is shown, In 1981, teacher's salaries accounted for 40% of the total revenue and had the highest spending. Teacher's pay in 1991 was a quarter more than the spending on furniture and equipment which was 15%. Spending on resources
such
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 as books in 1981 was 5% lower than in 1991. In 1991, revenue spent on insurance was 1% just over as compared to insurance spending in 1981.
To sum up
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, we could say that, the school managed to reduce its total costs on other worker's salaries in 1991 by 7%
while
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 increasing spending on resources by 5% in the same year.

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