The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
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The line graph shows how many thousands of
people
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took part in
basketball
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, tennis,
badminton
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, and
rugby
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in a certain area from 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
people
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engaging in
basketball
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and
badminton
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as a
sport
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activity remained almost unchanged,
while
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it is clear that
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the
number
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of
rugby
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fans reduced dramatically. Looking at the data, in 1985 the
number
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of
participants
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who played
rugby
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was the highest, with nearly 250
thousand
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people
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. It was the point when it started falling down and accounted for 200
thousand
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participants
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playing
rugby
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in 1995. During the next
decade
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decade,
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it experienced a dramatic downward trend, with the
number
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of
participants
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dropping to 50
thousand
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in 2005. In terms of tennis, the figures increased steadily, starting from 150
thousand
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athletes.
This
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number
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grew until it had more than 200
thousand
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people
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taking part in
this
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game
at the end
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of the period (2005).
However
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, the remaining two sports had nearly the same
number
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of
people
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participating. The initial figure
of
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for
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badminton
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was around 50
thousand
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individuals.
In contrast
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,
basketball
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, which attracted about 75
thousand
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participants
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in 1985. Throughout the period, the participation levels in
badminton
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and
basketball
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remained relatively similar.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, basketball, badminton, rugby, number, participants, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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