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Band 5.5

You recently visited a local restaurant with your family and had a very good meal. Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper. In your letter ● explain where the restaurant is ● describe what you ate in the restaurant ● say why you would recommend the restaurant to others

Dear Sir , I am writing
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 letter to draw your attention to the restaurant which
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 recently opened in our town ,
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 is
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 amazing
place
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 to visit with your friends and family members. The name of the restaurant is Saffron which is located on the main road of the Hespeler Village Cambridge. Everyone can visit there through
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public transportation or by their own vehicles,
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 is the primary reason why people love
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place
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. The restaurant is very neat and clean and magnificent service was provided by the employees . I visited
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place
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 a week ago with my friends and we ordered Indian food
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 , I liked dal
makhni
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makhani
 and karahi paneer with butter naan .
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, non - vegetarian options are
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 available and
this
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place
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 is budget friendly
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 why I recommended
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place
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 to everyone and I hope the local people will enjoy their spare time . I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours faithfully, Ram

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This makes your argument clearer and your letter more organized. In your letter, you could separate the location and transportation details into one paragraph and the dining experience and recommendation into another.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a higher score in logical structure, try to organize your information more sequentially. Begin with an introduction to the restaurant, then progress to your experience, and conclude with your recommendation. This will help your reader follow your thought process more easily.
Task Achievement
In terms of task achievement, providing more specific details about what made the restaurant special (e.g., ambiance, quality of service, unique dishes) would help reinforce your recommendation. This makes your argument more persuasive.
Task Achievement
Make sure your letter has a suitable tone for its audience. Considering your audience is a newspaper editor and the wider public, maintaining a formal but inviting tone is crucial. Your letter is on the right track but watch out for overly casual phrases and ensure punctuation is accurately used to maintain formality.
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