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Many countries have embraced tourisma as a way to boost their economies and create jobs for local residents. However, some argue that tourism can have negative impacts on the environment and local cultures. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism for a country?

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Tourism
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 in many countries
have
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 grown for several years and
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a great way to develop their nation's economies,
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 some believe that it can damage local cultures and the environment.
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 there are some
advantages
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 of
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, I believe that negatives should be taken into account. On the
one
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 hand, there
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advantages
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 of
tourism
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One
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 of the main
advantages
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 can provide a popular leisure activity and people enrich
experience
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 with travelling opens our minds. If you have some ideas.
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, you can see different animals,
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and landscape
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landscape
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landscapes
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 and visit
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special
place
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places
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such
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mountain
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mountains
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,
beach
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beaches
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,
overseas
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and overseas
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.
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, you may be able to go to the museum and begin the growth of your mind.
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 mentioned positives, there are several disadvantages of
tourism
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One
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 of the major disadvantages of it is that
tourism
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 can have
a
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negatives
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effects on the natural environment.
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, tourists may
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 local sites
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 rubbing
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different things.
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,
one
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 of the
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major negatives is that our local cultures are affected by tourists. In conclusion, I believe that there are several benefits of
tourism
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.
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,
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advantages
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 may be able to outweigh the disadvantages.
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,
government
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the government
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 should develop
tourism
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a
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 income source to improve financial problems.
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,
government
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the government
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 do not have to harm to natural environment and local cultures.
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Grammar and Clarity
Carefully proofread for grammatical errors and to ensure clarity in your sentences. For example, "Tourism in many countries have grown" should be "Tourism in many countries has grown".
Vocabulary
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and make your essay more engaging. For example, instead of repeatedly using "negatives" or "advantages", you could use synonyms like "drawbacks," "benefits," or "downsides".
Structure
Ensure your essay follows a clear structure. While you have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, some paragraphs seem to mix advantages and disadvantages. Try to keep each paragraph focused on a single topic for better clarity.
Supporting Examples
Support your points with more specific examples and details. For instance, instead of saying "tourists may be damaged local sites," provide a specific example of a place where this has happened and explain the consequences.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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