Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Advertisement
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could be a profitable way to promote a
product
for a company. It mainly comes down to the type of
product
and the context of the
advertisement
and sometimes the trend or what people think is better. Context and the reasoning of
advertise
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is
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way more important than
it
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they
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seems
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.
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, advertising
a
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insurance company after a heartbreaking incident could be very successful. The moment some group of
consumers
find an
advertise
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interesting or useful, they would have
slight
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a slight
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bias towards that
product
even if they like it or not.
Consumers
don’t have enough reasons to stick to a
product
but personal experience and
advertisement
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advertisements
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they see and that’s why a good
advertisement
could persuade
consumer’s
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consumers’
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opinion
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opinions
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. Products are different from one another too. People usually have
favorites
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when it comes to snacks and foods and they hardly change their
opinion
on these types of products, but good
advertisement
would make
consumers
to
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go out of their way to test and try to experience new
flavors
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and snacks.
This
type of advertising a
product
which
are
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anonymous and would tickle consumer’s curiosity in my
opinion
, is one of the best and most successful ways to convince people to use some products. Not every
advertisement
is successful and not all advertisements are ignored and useless, but in my
opinion
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the power of advertising is far more powerful than what
consumers
think and believe.
This
power is
being
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becoming
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more valuable in
days
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the days
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of modern technologies with social media in the hands of everybody.
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Ensure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your viewpoint. Consider using a structure that includes a brief overview of the views to be discussed before stating your own position.
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Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. While your essay hinted at general ideas, incorporating clear and concrete examples will strengthen your arguments and increase task achievement.
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Work on creating a clear logical structure in your essay. Use clear paragraphs for each main idea, and make sure each paragraph has a clear main sentence that guides the rest of the paragraph.
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Include a concluding paragraph that summarizes the discussed views and clearly states your opinion. This helps to round off the essay and reinforces your position to the reader.
coherence and cohesion
To improve clarity and flow, link ideas and paragraphs more explicitly. Use transitional phrases to show relationships between ideas, and ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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