Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.  In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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There is
an
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common view
says
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that learning
english
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is more important than learning local
languages
, If these are not taught, many may be at risk of losing their lives. It is important to learn
English
,
but
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local
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the local
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language
too. We need to find the right balance to learn each of the
languages
. On the one hand, Learning
English
at school is necessary for
individuals
in their future lives. Nowadays, every one of the employers take
a
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employee because of their knowledge in
english
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.
This
is because
English
is in demand, From the research every 1 in 10 people knows
English
,
it
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leads the
language
into demand. Most
of
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the
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organizations
written
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their address in
English
, and because of
this
individual
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who
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not
learned
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English
is
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in
situation
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, who did not
learned
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how to write and read.
On the other hand
,
If
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individuals
who only
put
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attention to 
English
class
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and did not
had
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a
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proper learning in
local
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language
can be hurt too.
Individuals
cannot learn any foreign
language
without knowing their own
language
, because to learn foreign words they need to understand its meaning and how to use it in
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and speaking, so without learning their own
language
, they cannot learn other
languages
.
For example
,
There
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are many people who
tried
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to learn overseas
languages
without learning their local, they
failed
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, and even cannot properly speak and use their own
language
. In conclusion,
Individuals
who are learning other
languages
apart from their native, they need to find the right spot to learn their native
language
and
English
. In my opinion, risking local
languages
to learn
English
cannot happen. Our own
language
is like our heart and most valuable treasure, losing
this
is the most serious thing.
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