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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar
chart
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 gives information about the proportion of males and females who participated in four different evening courses at the
center
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 of adult education in 2009, and the pie
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 illustrates the percentage of ageing groups in five categories among these subject attendance.
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, it is clearly seen that women joined all classes rather than men, except
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 sculpture study. As can be seen, people above 50 tended to join, which was the most popular
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, there were three courses in the adult education centre, namely, drama, painting, and language, indicating women attended more than men. First of all, 40% of the 2-fold more females than 20% of male adults join the language club by 20%. At
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 stage, the proportion of drama (56%) and painting (30%) courses attended by both genders.
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, joining sculpture experienced that the percentage of men was larger than women, to merely 5%.
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, the figure had the lowest number of participants in all subjects. Moving to the pie
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, the figure depicted distinctive
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 groups, including those aged under 20, 20–29, 30-39, 40–49, and 50 or over.
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, the largest percentage witnessed by the
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 of above 50 was 42%, which was eight times higher than the smallest number of people under 20. At
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 stage, the second popularity of the
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 segment was 40–49 (26%). The proportion of people aged 20 to 39 was approximately 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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