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You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it

#work #manager #-apologize #-explain #-say
Dear Sir , I am writing
this
 letter to apologize because I was unable to attend the important meeting that was held yesterday in our main office. Yesterday, I had a severe stomach ache and I took medicine for some relief with
a
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 thought that it
will
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 be diminished within an hour
however
, I was wrong about my intuitions . The pain became worse
then
 I called the paramedics and they took me to the hospital. After a long wait,
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the doctor
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doctor
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 diagnosed me and asked for
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CT scan for
further
 investigation.
Finally
, they found that I had
infection
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an infection
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 in my appendix
hence
 , they performed
surgical
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 procedure to remove it
also
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and also
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they
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advised me to take rest for two weeks. When I
will
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resume
to
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my work I will be able to ask
significant
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 details regarding
this
 meeting from my colleagues or a video recording would be the other option to understand all the steps. I hope you can understand my situation and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ram
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Greeting and Closing
Make sure to personalize your greeting and closing more effectively to maintain a suitable tone throughout the letter.
Coherence
While your letter has a good structure, consider using connectors and transition words more effectively to improve the flow between ideas.
Task Achievement
You've addressed all parts of the task effectively. To improve, you could add more details to your explanation, providing a deeper insight into how you plan to make up for your absence beyond catching up with colleagues.
Writing Tone
Using a more formal tone consistently throughout your letter would be beneficial. Avoid casual phrases and ensure correct punctuation to maintain professionalism.
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