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Some people think that the generation X ( people between 1997 and 2007) are more dishonest than the previous generations. Why does this happen? Is it a negative or positive development for the society?

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 X dishonesty is reported to be worse than the previous ones. The primary reason for people being dishonest is the lack of responsibility. In light of
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, I contend that
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 trend has adverse effects on the attitudes of future
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. A salient point that needs to be considered is that people of
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generation
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 X tend to be irresponsible.
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 the fact that in their childhood, most parents usually pampered them or even did not teach them to
responsible
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 for their mistakes.
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, in turn, may lead to a bad habit for their children and when they grow up, they will tend to blame themselves on others in order to avoid responsibility
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 not to be reprimanded.
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,
this
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 tendency could have a negative consequence in terms of the following
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's way
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 with their
crimes
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. It should be self-evident that individuals often mimic each other and it is true for later
generations
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.
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, when future
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 observe the previous ones commit
crimes
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such
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 as robbers or felons but these criminals were not punished or held accountable for their
crimes
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.
As a consequence
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, these situations will increase the rate of social evils or offenders in the future as the later
generations
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 will suppose that they can avoid responsibility by lying and denying their
crimes
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 like previous
generations
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 did.
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, it can be seen that the core reason why the
generation
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 X are more dishonest than the older is
the
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irresponsibility.
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,
this
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 has a negative influence on later
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generation
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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the task. Your essay should not only explain causes but also explicitly discuss whether this trend is positive or negative for society.
coherence cohesion
While your essay demonstrates a structure, further improvement in the logical flow and connection between ideas is needed. Transition words and phrases can help in enhancing coherence.
task achievement
Develop your arguments with more specific examples and explanations to substantiate your points, making your response more compelling.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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