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The bar graph below shows the consumption of natural gas world wide from 1950 to 1990.

The bar graph below shows the consumption of natural gas world wide from 1950 to 1990.
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The chart illustrates how much natural
gas
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 was consumed worldwide between 1950 and 1990. As clearly seen from the chart, Indonesia had by far the greatest natural
gas
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consumption
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, with the figures fluctuating between about 17,000 and 20,000
units
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. Malaysia and France
also
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 had a constant level of
consumption
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,
although
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 the figure for Malaysia was higher than that for France (13,000
units
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 compared to approximately 11,000
units
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 respectively).
However
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, over the forty-year period, the amount of natural
gas
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 consumed in Australia decreased significantly from 15,000
units
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 to 5,000
units
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.
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, Spain experienced the greatest increase, doubling from only 8,000 to about 17,000
units
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. The
consumption
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 in Japan
also
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 had an upward trend. The country consumed just below 5,000
units
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 of natural
gas
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 at the beginning of the period
,
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 and was consuming over 11,000
units
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 by the year 1990.
Overall
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, natural
gas
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consumption
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 tended to rise or
remained
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 stable over the entire period, with the exception of Australia.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, consumption, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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