The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010
The line graph
indicate
how older people spent their leisure between 1980 to 2010 in Europe.
Change the verb form
indicates
Overall
, it can be see
that the percentage of older people Change the verb form
be seen
spent
their free time in Europe Correct pronoun usage
who spent
are
fluctuated wildly in 1990. The hiking Unnecessary verb
apply
are
higher than Change the verb form
is
other
four activities.
Correct article usage
the other
To begin
, reading and theatre followed a fairly similar pattern. Both of
activities Change preposition
apply
are
fluctuate. The general trend is surfing the internet Unnecessary verb
apply
are climb
sharply Wrong verb form
climbed
50
Change preposition
by 50
percent
in 2010 and the
playing Correct article usage
apply
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
are
Verb problem
apply
rise
in 2000 have 70 Replace the word
rose
percent
and down in 2010 approximately
65 Change preposition
by approximately
percent
.
Interestingly, hiking started at 20 percent
in 1980, and in 2010 increased 80 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
. Which far exceeded Change the spelling
per cent
than
other Change preposition
apply
free time
activitiesAdd a hyphen
free-time
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