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The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009

The line chart below shows the number of cars produced in three countries from 2003 to 2009
The table below illustrates how many
cars
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 each country produced
by
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in
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 the three periods time, 2003, 2006 and 2009. It can be clearly seen that Thailand
had produce
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produced
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 the most
cars
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, compared to
others
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other
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 countries. Between 2003 and 2009, Argentina
had
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produced around one million
cars
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aproximately
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approximately
,
starts
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starting
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 from 235.088, in 2003 and 466.089 in 2009, which
also
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 shows that there is about a gradual increase over those periods of time. Moving forward to Australia, 2003 was the year with the most produced
cars
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,
starts
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starting
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 from 452.163, to slightly less than 250.000
cars
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 in 2009. Thailand had
produce
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produced
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 the most number of vehicles in 2006, just over one million,
while
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 in 2009 and 2003, the number of
cars
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were
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was
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allways
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always
 over 700.000
on
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in
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 both periods.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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