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Band 4

Some cities have vehicle- free days when private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned from the city center. public transportation like buses , taxis, and metros are advised. To what extend do you think the advantaged of the policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
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numbers
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number
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 of private
vehicles
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are
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 increasing in the world
particularly
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, particularly
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 in urban areas .
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 , some companies
governments
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and governments
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 have
got
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made
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 a decision to ban private
cars
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in
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on
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 some days
such
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 as weekends or special hours.
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, there are some positive or negative effects
to
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 society. I think that the policy of banning private
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transports
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transport
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 is more beneficial than drawbacks .
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 with, the negative influence of banning private
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transports
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transport
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 in
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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in
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on
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 some days
that
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leads
selling
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the sales of
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cars
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 to decrease.
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, when government encourages individuals to utilize public
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transports
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transport
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 rather than drive their private
vehicles
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, it would fall in selling
cars
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 or motorbikes.
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,
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cars’
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cars
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 companies will make
loss
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a loss
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 in their trading.
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, in 2018, Toyota industry company fired some
its
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of its
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employers
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employees
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 in Switzerland.
This
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 is because the Switch government had banned using private
vehicles
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in
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on
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 Sundays .
Thus
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,locals stopped purchasing
vehicles
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.
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, the business company made
loss
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a loss
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 in their trading and obligated its workers to fire.
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 , the important positive impact of banning private
vehicles
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that
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is that
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 helps to reduce
loud
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loudness
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 and
noisy
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noise
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 in
city
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 environments.
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, in
generally
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general
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,
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city
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the city
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 lifestyle is full of loud and high
voice
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voices
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.
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, people who are living in
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city
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the city
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unhappy
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are unhappy
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from
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with
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 it. Meanwhile, if
government
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the government
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 do not allow using private
vehicles
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, it would have a decline
of
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in
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 loud and
get
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quite
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quiet
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.
This
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 is dues to satisface locals in cities.
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,
according to
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 research, 75%
citizens
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of citizens
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 of Scotland are
satisfacted
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satisfied
in
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with
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a weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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.
This
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 is because
,
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apply
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 the Scottish
ministry
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Ministry
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 of
transport
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Transport
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 did not confirm
to drive
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driving
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 private
cars
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 and motorbikes
in
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at
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 weekends.
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, comfortable
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 were spread in urban
center
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centers
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 and gave enjoyment away from high sounds .
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, another advantage of banning them
that
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is that
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 cause to have a fall pollution in
city
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 environments. In fact, a lot of transport
are
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is
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 damaged
to
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by
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 weather and environment likely
pullotion
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pollution
.
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, it is able to solve it by banning some of
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transports
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the transports
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 . In conclusion, there are so many
benefit
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benefits
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 and damage impacts of banning private
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transports
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transport
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 in
urab
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urban
 areas.
Nevertheless
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,
the
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for the
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 reasons mentioned above it seems that banning them
is
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has
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 more positive influences than
its
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apply
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harms
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harm
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.

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