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The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
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These charts depict the essential goals of
practicing
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practising
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exercises
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as a result
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 of performing
a
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research, and they indicate the places, where
people
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 prefer to do their
exercises
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that most
people
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 like doing
exercises
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 for the purpose of refreshment, and the majority of them
does
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do
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 their
exercises
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 in public
sports
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 venues.
According to
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 what is shown, the highest percentage of individuals likes doing
exercises
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 for amusement, at 40% which is considered four times more than
people
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 who do
sports
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 to lose weight, at about 10%.
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, muscle toning is regarded as the second goal that
people
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 desire to achieve
it
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apply
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, at 25% which is more than twice the ratio of humans who wish to improve their mood, at 10%. Regarding
to
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the
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apply
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places of
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exercises
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exercise
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, many inhabitants do
sports
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 in Public
sports
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 venues,
at
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apply
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35% which is the biggest one,
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 a fifth of the population prefers
practicing
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practising
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 them in parks.
Furthermore
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, the ratio of doing
sports
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 in Gyms, Playgrounds, and Other places
are
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is
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 equal, at 15%.
To sum up
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, it can be said that a minority of
people
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 do
sports
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 for mood improvement, and the main location for doing them is Public
sports
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 venues.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exercises, people, sports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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