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Write a letter to your cousin congratulating him for his wedding and give reasons for not attending it. In your letter -congratulate him for his wedding -give reasons for not attending -tell him you will visit him soon

#cousin #-congratulate #-give #-tell #visit
let me start by
congratulation
Fix the agreement mistake
congratulations
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for
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on
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 your wedding.I am very sorry for not coming as I could not get leave from my work.
actually
Add a comma
actually,
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i
Change the capitalization
I
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 got your invitation for very short notice and at work we have to apply for vacation leave in advance,for at least one month...I
do
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apply
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really miss the celebration.you know how family count for me.please do thank
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Greeting and Closing
Start the letter with a proper greeting, such as 'Dear [Cousin’s Name],' to make your letter more personable and engaging.
Greeting and Closing
Ensure to conclude your letter with a suitable closing phrase, e.g., 'Looking forward to catching up soon. Take care, [Your Name].' This adds a personal touch and formally ends the letter.
Logial Structure
Organize your thoughts into clear, distinct paragraphs. One for congratulating them, another for explaining your absence, and a final one making future plans. This enhances readability.
Complete Response
Elaborate on why you regret missing the wedding and express more personal feelings about the event. Including more details will make your letter more heartfelt and complete the task more effectively.
Suitable Writing Tone
Avoid spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'congratulation' instead of 'congratulations'. Also, improve the formal tone by using full words rather than contractions ('I do really miss' should be 'I really do miss').

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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