The maps below give information about a plan to redevelop an industrial site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the changes that will take place in a manufacturing
area
.
Overall
, the industrial site will be undergoing a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the disappearance of offices and the development of housing.
The west of the industrial area
saw a number of transformations, with the vanishing of parking and storage and the appearance of 7-bedroom houses instead
. Similarly
, those amenities also
will be built in the north where is entrance and reception now.
In the centre of the manufacturing site, the yard was expected into communal gardens and an internal road in order to ensure the residents' privacy and convenience. In addition
, there is a factory in the east of the area
, but it will be redeveloped into a parking area
and apartment. Finally
, the project developer plans to build parking garages, replacing the office area
in the south to cater for serving vehicle repair and maintenance needs.Submitted by phuongdong.nguyentran on
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