the graph below shows radio and television audiences throught the day in 1992. Wright a report for a university lecture describing the information shown below.
The line graph illustrates variations in
popularity
of Correct article usage
the popularity
TV
versus Radio
in UK
during winter in 1992 among those Correct article usage
the UK
aging
4 years old or more in a Replace the word
aged
24 hour
period.
We can see that Add a hyphen
24-hour
TV
does enjoy much more overall
popularity
especially
during evenings and nights, which is why Add the comma(s)
, especially
TV
audiences
surge to 45 percent
around 21 o’clock and reduces
as we get closer to midnight (about 15%).
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reduce
On the other
hand
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hand,
radio
audiences
start listening to it since
early in the morning ( 6 am), with a dramatic rise till 8 am when Change preposition
apply
radio
audiences
peaked at 25 percent
, after Change the spelling
per cent
that
Add a comma
that,
this
trend is replaced by 10 percent
till 13. At Change the spelling
per cent
this
time of the day
television Add a comma
day,
audiences
overtake that of the radio
, while
people listening to radio
fall to 10 and 5 Correct article usage
the radio
percent
in 17 and 24, respectively.
It is clear that
people prefer to listen to the radio
in the morning between 6 to 8 am, when radio
reaches its highest popularity
(25 percent
of the population around 8 o’clock ), Change the spelling
per cent
while
TV
popularity
remains steady until 11 am,
when we see a slight rise in Remove the comma
apply
it’s
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its
audiences
till 13. Two hours later television experience
a surge of 30 Wrong verb form
experienced
percent
in Change the spelling
per cent
it’s
Replace the word
its
audiences
till 21.Submitted by bakhti on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words popularity, tv, radio, audiences, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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