The chart below shows the different types of accommodations chosen by the British when they were on holidays in 2013.

The chart below shows the different types of accommodations chosen by the British when they were on holidays in 2013.
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The provided bar chart illustrates the percentage of British tourists' preferences
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four different places to stay, including self-catering,
caravan
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, camping, and hotel, during their holiday in 2013.
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, it is evident that
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topped the chart as the primary choice among British visitors. Self-catered accommodation was the second favourite among the tourists from England, Scotland, and Wales.
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caravan
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was the top two option for travellers from Northern Ireland. In 2013,
hotel
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the hotel
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was the
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first choice
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the British who travel, accounting for more than 40% from four different England countries. People who travelled from England, Scotland, and Wales put self-catered accommodation as their second choice,
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for more than 20%, 30%, and slightly less than 30%, respectively. Among these visitors,
caravan
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and camping were the least favourable options. In terms of
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caravan
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caravans
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, travellers from Northern Ireland showed different preferences.
Caravan
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was the second favourite option for accommodation, accounting for slightly more than 30%. It is
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followed by camping and self-catering with more than 10% each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words caravan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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