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The maps show a hospital in 2007 and 2010.

The maps show a hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The maps show a medical
center
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 and the area around it in 2007 and 2010. The place has undergone considerable changes in terms of roads and areas for transportation. The hospital had one straight
road
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 in 2007 and it
converted
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 into a
road
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 with two roundabouts. The transportation to the hospital changed by certain arrangements in buses. The medical pavilion was connected to the City
Road
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with
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in
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 a regular way and it changed into a
road
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 with 2 roundabouts placed
to
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at
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 the two ends of the Hospital
Road
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, joining at a new bus station located at the west side of the Hospital
Road
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. With the construction of a station for buses, the old stops for passengers
removed
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 from the two sides of the Hospital
Road
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.
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, the medical place changed its parking plan by closing the hybrid parking space to the public and assessed it to only
staffs
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staff
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 of the hospital.
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, for the vehicles of the
patiences
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patients
, a new parking area
constructed
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was constructed
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to
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on
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 the east side of the healthcare place, allowing people to enter
to
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apply
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the
road
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 named Ring
Road
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 surrounding the hospital.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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