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The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.

The graph below shows the amount of UK investments in clean energy from 2008 to 2015.
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The presented bar graph provides us with data on
UK
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investment
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 in clean
energy
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 over the span of 7 years, from 2008 until 2015. The key sources of clean
energy
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 in
this
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 depiction are:
wind
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, solar
energy
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,
energy
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 smart technologies and other As we can see, over the course of these 7 years,
wind
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 has been the one renewable source of
energy
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 steadily invested into,
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 solar
energy
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 emerged as an
investment
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 possibility more timidly than other sources.
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, solar power had apparently been deemed important, given the drastic climb from less than a billion to just around 2.5 billion within just one year, between 2010 and 2011. Worth noting is the fact that
wind
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 takes up a large portion of the
investment
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 fund, reaching an all-time high in the year 2015, taking up more than half of the funding for clean
energy
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 in the
UK
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.
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energy
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 smart technologies have been invested
into from
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 the year 2008, their share in the funding is continuously the slightest and make up a minority in the funding plan of the
UK
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.
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this
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 bar chart illustrated the data on clean
energy
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investment
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 in the
UK
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, showcasing the
wind
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 as the most vital component and highlighting solar powers big soar.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, investment, energy, wind with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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