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Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it's not endless

#think #water #governments #limit
Some people think that
government
 should
limit
water
resources
 but some may not. Now you may think
of
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that people
uses
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use
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water
everyday
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 and the population on earth is over a few million, but over a few years from 2020
water
resources
decrease
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have decreased
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in
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 a decent amount and people know about
his
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. So I think that
government
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the government
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 should
limit
water
resources
. Now I know that if
government
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the government
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limit
water
resources
 humans will definitely complain about
the
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human rights,
thye
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they
 will think that they have the right to
use
 natural
resources
 or there are still plenty of
resources
 why should we reduce the amount we
use
 when we are changing the lifestyle we had
.
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On the other hand
, we know that nothing is unlimited so one day the things we have will be exhausted. For
long term
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use
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 we have to
limit
 the
use
 of
resource
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resources
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 or else it will be too late one day. We all know if so it is unfair to us but we know that life is unfair, nothing is fair in life. In conclusion,
government
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 should
limit
water
resources
 long
term
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long-term
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 human life but for
short
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the short
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 term we don't have
limit
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limited
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resources
,
thus
llimiting
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limiting
eliminating
water
 is important for
human
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humans
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 for future days.
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Consider presenting a clear thesis statement in your introduction, stating your position on the government limiting water resources.
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Develop your paragraphs fully. Each should present one main idea, supported by reasons and examples. This makes your position clearer and your argument stronger.
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For a higher score in coherence and cohesion, ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to the next. Use a range of linking words effectively (e.g., however, therefore, consequently) to connect ideas within and between paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay clearly with distinct sections: an introduction, at least two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each section should serve a specific purpose.
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Include relevant and specific examples to support your main points. This strengthens your argument and makes your essay more persuasive.
general
Pay attention to the accuracy and variety of your sentence structures and vocabulary. Varied sentence types and precise word choices can significantly enhance the clarity and impact of your writing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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