Some people say that the main aim of advertising is to improve the sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Increasing the rate of
sales
of products
is the main purpose of advertising, despite this
goods are not very essential for people
. Although
it could cause some people
may hesitate to make a choice while
purchasing, I totally agree that the main target of the advertisement
should be improving the income
.
The advertisement
of unnecessary products
could affect people
's decisions. Too many advertisements for products
, which are both necessary and unnecessary, might give a lot of information to customers. As a result
, customers may have many options and suffer to choose the most needed goods.Also
, they could become indecisive. For example
, many researches proved that advertisements of unimportant products
can increase the customer's stress level while
purchasing. Thus
, products
which are not necessary should not be advertised.
On the other hand
, it may have some advantages. Too much advertising products
can improve income
. The main reason is that people
are getting used to seeing advertisements for goods, before buying them. If the rate of advertisement
is increased, the sales
of products
would rise, respectively. Consequently
, the income
from sales
products
will increase. For example
, the advertisement
of less needed products
like Coca-Cola showed a 13% growth in benefits after huge promotion, in 2020. Therefore
, the main aim of advertising should be getting more benefits.
In conclusion, the advertising of less important things might have a negative effect on customers' making decisions while
buying. However
, it is a great opportunity to improve sales
of products
and income
and also
earn too much money.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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