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Some people think that paying taxes is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards our society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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whether
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people
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 have more
responsibities
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responsibilities
 or not in
society
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.
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, some
people
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 say that
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the submission
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 of
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tax
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taxes
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 to the government
only
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 the
populations
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population's
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 obligation,
while
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 others argue that there are more responsibilities in
society
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This
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 essay discusses both viewpoints and I strongly agree with the latter opinion
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 the following paragraphs. On the one hand, paying
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tax
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taxes
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 is the primary and only duty of the public to the ruling party
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 the authorities will do the rest of everything
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 the population.
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 is because
every one
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everyone
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pay
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pays
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tax
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taxes
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 to the government in various ways
such
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 as service
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, product
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 and earning
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, so individuals do and finish their part to
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 by paying
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levies
lays
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, numerous nation's main revenues are collecting money from
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 in
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 of taxes,
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 they provide free education, hospital Service and building road to their citizens.
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,
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 of
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only
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the only
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responsibities
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responsibility
 of mankind
do
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to
society
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, humans have more obligations to do in
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besides
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 paying
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tax
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taxes
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.
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 is because
people
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 should maintain the
environment
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by
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through
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a
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proper disposal
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apply
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.waste, protecting the
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 and reduce the
are
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area
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 pollution because the authorities only provide all these
arrenities
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amenities
 to The public but mankind has to maintain properly and
this
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 is one of the mandatory obligations except
tax
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,
people
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 are the main
culprit
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culprits
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 for
ocozen
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ozone
 layer destruction, so they should.have their
duties
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duty
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 to protect our
environment
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 from
demages
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damages
damage
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, raising children with good moral principles
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also
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is also
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 the obligation of
people
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 because children are the sources of the state development of the future. In conclusion,
although
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 paying
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tax
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taxes
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 is only the responsibility.
to
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of
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 humankind
to
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apply
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society
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 in order to
people
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 can get more benefits from
tax
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 amount, protecting
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environment
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the environment
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 and raising children with morality are other obligations that individuals should
do
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have
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 towards
society
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. Even though, in my opinion, about
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, I strongly agree
with
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that
people
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 should dus more duties unless paying
tax
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.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure accurate use of vocabulary and grammar. There are several grammatical errors and usage of incorrect terms (e.g., 'weather' instead of 'whether', 'lavy' instead of 'levy', 'ocozen layer' instead of 'ozone layer') which disrupt the flow and clarity of your essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Focus on structuring your essay more clearly. Use clear paragraphs for each main point, and make sure each point is developed and expanded upon in a logical manner. Transition words can help link ideas together more smoothly.
Task Achievement
Respond fully to all parts of the task. While you have discussed both viewpoints and given your opinion, consider expanding your examples to more directly support your arguments. This will help make your essay more persuasive and comprehensive.
Task Achievement
Improve the clarity and specificity of your ideas. Some points are general and could be made more persuasive with specific examples or more detailed explanations. Avoid making broad statements without backing them up.
General Advice
Work on your spelling and punctuation. Misspelled words and missing or misplaced punctuation can make your essay difficult to understand. Consider using writing aids or proofreading more carefully before submission.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance your conclusion by summarizing your main points more clearly and restating your opinion. A strong, clear conclusion leaves the reader with a lasting impression of your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • social welfare
  • economic stability
  • legal consequences
  • volunteering
  • community service
  • societal well-being
  • donation
  • charities
  • social issues
  • active participation
  • democracy
  • civil society
  • healthy society
  • balancing
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