The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The bar chart gives a detailed illustration of the number of social media spots used by men and women in Canada in the years 2014 and 2015. These figures are stated in percentages.
Overall
, it is evident that those who employed the usage of just one site recorded the highest rate
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whereas
those who used five were the least within the
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year
period of the study. In the
year
2014, Canadians who used just a space on social networks were the highest, with a rate of 36% followed by those who used two sites with a proportion of 23%.
However
, 2% of people used
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five network locations,
whereas
more than 50% of
this
(5%)
also
had four networks. A
year
after
this
, there was a drop in the number of citizens in Canada who used just one media place by 8% (28%) and
also
a percentage drop
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those who didn't use any space at all.
By contrast
, all others increased with nationals who used three various sites showing the highest increase in rate of 4%, which was 16% in the
year
2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative data
  • Utilization
  • Consecutive years
  • Overall trends
  • Proportion
  • Notable changes
  • Consistencies
  • Diversification
  • Summarize
  • Reflecting
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