The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The given diagram demonstrates the phases
of salmon's life span.
Overall
, in about a 10 year
period they become mature. Add a hyphen
10-year
Also
, it is shown that they have main 3 stages, of development in their physic.
Firstly
, they turn into reeds from eggs and then
into fries which has
3 to 8 centimeters Verb problem
are
length
in 5 to 6 months. Change preposition
in length
In
Change preposition
During
this
time, they live in a
calm upper rivers which have quick flows and live there for 4 yearsCorrect the article-noun agreement
apply
approximately
. Rephrase
apply
Then
, they are shifted into smolts from fries which is
12 to 15 centimeters long. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Finally
, after they are ready to emerge in open seas, it takes 5 years for them to become adult which has
70-76cm Verb problem
is
length
.Change preposition
in length
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